Rain patters down on the plastic roof outside the window. The breeze comes through the slats, fresh and delicious, bearing with it a smell of clean, sweet moisture. The sounds of the street are slightly muted, everything growing hushed in the soft rain. Even buses, with their monstrous thundering and their creaking halts, sound soft and polite as the drops come down lightly from the wispy gray clouds.
As the drizzle grows into a rain, the light seems brighter, more cheery. The small comforts of home – the sweatshirt flung on the back of the chair, the cat curled up in a ball on the couch – become more cozy and endearing by far. Even as the rain turns into a respectable downpour, the home becomes the perfect nest, wonderfully familiar, all of it softer around the edges somehow.
If only the rain could go on all night, it would accompany the soft light of the reading lamp and the soft rustle of pages as they are lovingly turned in their spine. A rain of this sort can only herald the sweetest and most comfortable of sleeps. If only it would go on all night.
But alas, all good things come to an end, and quickly, all too quickly, the autumn rain disappears, leaving behind it a comforting memory, a slight shiver of joy and a disappointed girl, who wanted to stay up all night reading with the rain.
It seems not very often, to me, that writers successfully convey atmosphere in their writing. Everyone is so damn busy getting to the dialogue, or action, that they give a cursory nod to setting and move along. Sure, there’s a lot to be said for pacing, but what you’ve written here is every bit as “softer around the edges” as intended.
I love the rain. Your description clearly paints a picture of an overcast day upon a side-street neighborhood. I can feel the warmth of your home and still hear the patter of rain outside.
Well done, I say. Very well done :^)
Cordially,
J.W. Nicklaus
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, J. W.! You really made my heart warm and gave me a great start to my day :).
You are absolutely welcome! It’s always a pleasure to read something that transports me somewhere because it’s well done. Keep at it!
I agree, beautiful imagery there. Well done, you will make a wonderful novelist 🙂
Gorgeous description!