Would you say a pity party
Is exactly what you need?
Pity parties are always on,
Always around, you know.
Pity parties can be a damn good time
If you know when to flow
But also when to go.
Pity parties can be flashy,
Full of drama and tears and moans.
But pity parties can be quiet, too,
Self-contained, strangled, alone.
Pity parties are partly parties
Perhaps because they’re pretty?
But no, that’s wrong, they’re pity parties,
Not some dance-a-roo.
Although, who knows?
Some may be. Maybe some people dance.
Maybe they dance and pity around,
Like doing the Hokey-Pokey.
They put their common sense in,
They take the sadness out,
They keep the sadness with them then,
And that’s what it’s all about.
Right?
Slightly Ignorant 
Ok, that is a crazily complex rhyme scheme. I’m impressed. And I love the content of the poem!
Ahh, “Self-contained, strangled, alone.” Darn pity parties.
Errrm…. More like non-rhyme scheme. I rather considered this a bad poem, but thanks for the support and I’m glad you liked it, weirdly structured as it is ^_^”.
I like the Hokey-Pokey bit. Sad poem, though. =[
Thanks! And yeah, it was meant to be…
“Pity parties can be a damn good time If you know when to flow But also when to go.”
I love the melody of this poem, it was sad but also sarcastic and powerful, well done!
I love that you used the word “melody” – I can now imagine some music with it, actually, and I have to say that many poems have what I’d consider melody too, more than rhythm or rhyme or whatever. Melody is such a perfect word to describe the way some poems sound…
Thanks – I’m really glad you liked it!
This poem reminds me that I try to stay away from pity parties, especially my own.
Good luck – I hope you manage better than me ;P
You have such a way with words! I love the sarcasm. Darn pity parties. A good reminder to avoid them at all costs.
Thanks! Stupid pity-parties indeed!
my pity parties tend to be a bit angry. More like self delusional parties with a pinch of loathing and go portion of doubt.
Nice poem.
Hmm, yes, anger fits in there well, too…
Thanks!
Had to come out of lurking just to say how much I liked this one. I think it hits the spot, in just the right way. Keep on writing.
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Awww, hey there :). Glad that you still lurk at least!
I agree with Lua. I liked the melody of the poem and I loved the hokey pokey reference. Good job. well done.
I put my bum in for the hokey pokey part…
Love this, I always feel better after a pity party. I’ll remember next time to throw in the hokey pokey!
New. Favorite. Poem. 🙂